Tuesday, February 22, 2005

Argument to Convince Thesis

Thesis: The government should stop gun ownership and make strict gun control.

Audience: My audience would be groups of innocent people who are victims of gun accidents. Age, gender and race do not make any difference. They would be from several economic statuses, be it rich or poor. They would oppose gun ownership with procedures legalized by the government, but believe that the government should make strict laws on gun control. Also, they would place great value on their lives since they are victims of gun accidents.

Aims: The audience may see the reasons why strict gun control is a good thing than no gun control, due to their experiences. I need to remove the words ‘stop’ and ‘strict’ completely and broaden it more because it sounds too extreme. To say strict gun control is insane because they would definitely need guns for protection. I need to use legalize or authorize for gun ownership.

Revised Thesis:

1.The government should regulate gun ownership and keep the society safe off guns.

It does not convince the audience on how gun control can be handled.

2.Gun ownership should be allowed to some extent while enforcing gun control to keep the citizens safe.

This does not sound convincing because methods of acquiring guns are not clarified.

3.Citizens should undergo several background checks and testing before possession of guns is authorized.

It sounds convincing to the audience since gun ownership can be authorized and still
handles gun control.

Tuesday, February 15, 2005

Revision

1. The purpose of this paragraph is to express my opinions on gun control and how restriction of gun possession can affect the society.

2. I want the readers to be able to understand that the thought of gun control cannot be looked as a solution to gun violence. I also want my readers to understand my stand on the issue of gun control.

Revision

We take gun control as the only way we can solve the problem of gun violence. I suggest we look into the issue gun control causes. The issue of gun ownership is usually based on the crime rate in the society. This limits us to looking at gun control as the only solution to gun violence. Like an idiom says, “ the cause brings about the effect,” which shows that gun control brings about gun violence. For example, the laws restrict gun control but the society feels that the ownership of guns keeps them safer and also for different purposes of gun. In societies with strict gun controls are in the high rate of crimes. The society has different views on gun control, which leads to violence because most of the societies do not support gun control and some do.

This leaves us with the question: “ What is the main solution to gun ownership?”

Original

I believe that there should be no gun control in the society because it can bring about chaos in the society. Half of the society will be suggesting about gun control and others will not and this can lead to chaos and disorganized society. I did not grow around guns and know nothing much about it but I believe that anybody that possesses a gun has an important purpose of it. If there is strict gun control laws in the society, it leads to violence in the society because people can go to any extent to posses a gun even to the extent of obtaining it illegally which also leads to high increase of fraud in the society. If the government highly wants to restrict the possession of guns in America, the black market should be closed because there is no way civilians without license will not obtain guns.

3. I have learnt to revise my writings. One of the things I do is not having deep thoughts and questions of my opinions. But this has really helped me to think of my ideas and see where I stand on my opinions.

Thursday, February 03, 2005

Guns in America

When it comes to guns, I do not know anything because I was not raised around them or even near them. I can tell you that with the media and from what I have read from the newspapers, that the guns in the hands of unworthy persons are getting off hand.

The purpose for the invention of guns was to help make things easier during hunting of animals and also for the protection of people to prevent excess crime. The guns are only to be carried by the law officers. But, due to the development of the country and the introduction of technology, the purpose and the use of guns have deviated from its original purpose. Take for instance, many people in a particular neighborhood can carry guns in their pocket and just use them any time to kill or threaten people in any situation. These are the necessary information that one needs to look into and look for a better solution.

The legalization of guns in the America has a lot of benefits but as everything in this world, there are always advantages and disadvantages. Unfortunately, the disadvantages are the ones we most likely witness in our everyday life. In the media, newspaper or even on the Internet, different varieties of gun incidents tend to be the cause of the day. If it is not the murder of a victim, it is either the use of guns to threaten people into surrendering for a particular action that the offender has in mind: either rape or theft.

I am not trying to say that the use of guns in the America is bad but come to think of it what is really happening in this world we are living in when we talk of protecting our lives with the weapon that can serve as a means to successful protection. Nowadays, there are several news been heard about kids who shot classmate or schoolmate. The question is “Where do all these kids get all these guns in their possession?” Most of the guns are from home. Some students were brought up with guns. By then, they know were the guns are being kept, whether in the closet or in the shoe box. What are all these guns doing in the closet or in the bedroom dresser or under the pillow? This is the question, I believe, we should be asking ourselves. For the answer to this question I cannot say but everyone can answer to the question according to his or her own point of view.

As for me, I believe that Civilians tend to purchase guns for protection. This is the protection as regards to life and property. Although there are police officers or the law regulators who are supposed to be the carriers of these guns, it is not the same case in this new computer age. What do you think will happen when everyone is carrying a gun? I cannot even begin to imagine what the consequences will be. I shudder whenever I start to think about the damage that may tend to incur. Or what will happen when the guns fall into the hands of the wrong person? I will not go into answering that because I believe everyone knows the answer to the question: terrorism, nightmares and frequent death incidents.

You may begin to think that through out the paper, I have been writing about the dangers of guns and its disadvantages and you start to ask; Are there no good thing about guns? Certainly, there are a lot of very good benefits of having guns. One of them is that gun is used in sports. Take for instance, it is used to notify swimmers when to start swimming contest or even the athlete when to start their race. Also guns are used for hunting activities. The hunters have a particular gun type to use during hunting. Guns also are used to protect people during office work, as we all know. These and many more are the benefits we value guns.

Finally, I will like to say that indeed guns in the America have been a major problem that needs further study and more survey to see what people actually think about the use of guns.