Argument to Convince Thesis

Thesis: The government should stop gun ownership and make strict gun control.

Audience: My audience would be groups of innocent people who are victims of gun accidents. Age, gender and race do not make any difference. They would be from several economic statuses, be it rich or poor. They would oppose gun ownership with procedures legalized by the government, but believe that the government should make strict laws on gun control. Also, they would place great value on their lives since they are victims of gun accidents.

Aims: The audience may see the reasons why strict gun control is a good thing than no gun control, due to their experiences. I need to remove the words ‘stop’ and ‘strict’ completely and broaden it more because it sounds too extreme. To say strict gun control is insane because they would definitely need guns for protection. I need to use legalize or authorize for gun ownership.

Revised Thesis:

1.The government should regulate gun ownership and keep the society safe off guns.

It does not convince the audience on how gun control can be handled.

2.Gun ownership should be allowed to some extent while enforcing gun control to keep the citizens safe.

This does not sound convincing because methods of acquiring guns are not clarified.

3.Citizens should undergo several background checks and testing before possession of guns is authorized.

It sounds convincing to the audience since gun ownership can be authorized and still
handles gun control.