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1. The purpose of this paragraph is to express my opinions on gun control and how restriction of gun possession can affect the society.

2. I want the readers to be able to understand that the thought of gun control cannot be looked as a solution to gun violence. I also want my readers to understand my stand on the issue of gun control.

Revision

We take gun control as the only way we can solve the problem of gun violence. I suggest we look into the issue gun control causes. The issue of gun ownership is usually based on the crime rate in the society. This limits us to looking at gun control as the only solution to gun violence. Like an idiom says, “ the cause brings about the effect,” which shows that gun control brings about gun violence. For example, the laws restrict gun control but the society feels that the ownership of guns keeps them safer and also for different purposes of gun. In societies with strict gun controls are in the high rate of crimes. The society has different views on gun control, which leads to violence because most of the societies do not support gun control and some do.

This leaves us with the question: “ What is the main solution to gun ownership?”

Original

I believe that there should be no gun control in the society because it can bring about chaos in the society. Half of the society will be suggesting about gun control and others will not and this can lead to chaos and disorganized society. I did not grow around guns and know nothing much about it but I believe that anybody that possesses a gun has an important purpose of it. If there is strict gun control laws in the society, it leads to violence in the society because people can go to any extent to posses a gun even to the extent of obtaining it illegally which also leads to high increase of fraud in the society. If the government highly wants to restrict the possession of guns in America, the black market should be closed because there is no way civilians without license will not obtain guns.

3. I have learnt to revise my writings. One of the things I do is not having deep thoughts and questions of my opinions. But this has really helped me to think of my ideas and see where I stand on my opinions.